150 Word Note: You have a solid piece of writing here for a rough draft. Your language and vocabulary is so eloquent I thought it was a final draft. Definitely loved the way your wording. Also, the relevancy of the subjects you chose will definitely help you connect more to the audience. Some things to overlook when writing, check your integration of quotes, and to see if you can address some points I marked in your essay. Other than that it was really good and I’m impressed. Awesome job!
Rahem,
You do a great job consistently engaging your peer’s essay. Don’t be afraid to offer more critical suggestions, however. Try to specifically note moments where your peer’s ideas could use a little “beefing up” and/or complicating. Questions can be a great tool if you want to help push your peer’s argument to the next level. Did you complete a 150-word note? If so, please make sure you post it here so that I can give you credit for having completed it.